Thursday, September 6, 2012

My name, is Jasmine. (;



Go on and ask me “what are you trying to do?
This flower, its nothing, nothing like you.”
Good morning all yes its time to get up,
the sun raises, a volcano ready to erupt.
Perked up on a warm summer day,
nothing like the suns bright rays,
To make me feel garish and light,
I sparkle like a firefly ready to take flight.
I feel the sun as I try to resist,
Ready, I am for that cooling mist.
As the sunset begins, the light descends,
The night stars instigate a blend.
It’s a new dawn, a new day,
The sun rises to fight the grey.
As I mature I may imbue others
with the joy, happiness, and brightness of my colors.
We are very alike, the flower and I,
I believe I did it, I convinced you didn’t I?
A poem with a picture, look at the caption.
Like this flower, my name is Jasmine.

Jasmine flower

21 comments:

  1. This is so sweet, and nice and i really liked the picture and rhyme scheme

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  3. Just like you, beautiful and amazing. It explained you. :)

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  4. That was sooo cute I really liked it, good job.

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  5. I love the incorporation of the flower to the your name and of the rhyme scheme that you followed with your poem. Good Job!

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  6. I love your rhyme scheme. I love you white girl ohh and that ending was beautiful :) white girl :) ohh good job.... white girl.... my white girl
    #no racism, you should know that i love you :)

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  7. this was like so sweet!!! :D i liked how you used descriptions of a flower as like your name!! it was a really pretty poem and i liked the rhyming! SOOO GOODDD!!! :D

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  8. I really liked the way you rhymed...if that makes sense. But it was a great poem!

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  9. Its really hard to rhyme
    Good job :)

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  10. what a awesome poem,nice rhyme scheme too!

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  11. That was so beautiful. You did an amazing job. :) I liked how well you did your ryhming. Youre so cute :) I love you jas<3

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  12. In my opinion, this is the best piece you've ever written! Sounded amazing, you rhymed really well and you should be proud. :)
    Awesome Job! <3

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  13. I like how yours rhymed and had a rhythm to it. Just like you said, you convinced me that you're just like the flower. I thought your description of the sunrise was BEAUTIFUL. c:

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  14. HI(: I thought you did great with your poem. I loved every single aspect of it. You really showed people you could write a poem. Remember when you said it was impossible? Guess not. It was AMAZING!

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  15. I liked that you didn't just write about your name, but that you had something to describe as well. You also had a very good flow with how you wrote it and you tied the two together very well.

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  16. i loved your poem, the picture was great!

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  17. I love the poem over all. I love how you started your poem with the story of the flower. I also love the pic of the flower, thats soo cutee!!

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  18. I liked how it had an actualy rhyme scheme to it and how you added the picture of a flower and said that you're both alike. it was really good.

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  19. i loved the rhyme scheme :) and the flower is beautiful just like your poem and you!

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  20. i believe again.... I BELIEVE!!!!!!!! AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

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